Tuesday, July 9, 2013

Lapdancing Girlfriend Ch05 "After the Fact" comments...

So there's a few things I wanted to share about Lapdancing Girlfriend Ch. 05, now that it's out, I couldn't share before.

If you have not finished the chapter, be advised, these are SPOILERS, so you may not want to read further!

*****SPOILER WARNING*****

 

First, there were many scenes not planned and came about only as I was writing.  The very first sex scene involving Tim is an example.  I was originally planning on Diamond merely being picked up and given a slutty outfit to be worn to the airport and on the plane.  The humiliation factor of being exposed to the public was the sole impetus of the first day; however, as I was writing, I thought, "How could dressing in revealing clothes upset a stripper?"  It needed something to tip it over the edge.

So I thought of her having to face the guy she was forced into having oral sex with--that would be pretty humiliating.  I began to write about him picking her up, watching her get dressed.  Now THAT was something she could get embarrassed about, as it would be within her own home.  

But once again I wanted something "over the top" in terms of degrading her, so figured him taking her in the airplane bathroom would do it.

I do not enjoy pure rape, non-consensual scenes, but I do enjoy if the woman is reluctant or even initially forced, as long as she enjoys it in the end and does not feel as if it were "rape" in the most brutal sense of the term.  That is why I started out with Tim feeling her up in her sleep.  She was already aroused, and that arousal led to her enjoying her rendezvous with Tim on the plane...even if she was against it initially.

The photo-shoots were created 'on the fly' as well.  I did not plan on ANY sex scenes, thinking along the lines of Mr. DeWight that Diamond needed to be slowly introduced into the fold of the porn industry; however, then I realized it would be more humiliating and degredating if Diamond actually was the one to accept her degradation before anybody thought she would.  That she would not be expected to behave in a depraved manner and actually did would be more upsetting to her in the end than writing it off as "I was forced into it" type of scene.

And so came the masturbation scene during her first photo-shoot.

The second photo-shoot was actually going to be her merely being exposed before another naked male model.  I had planned to write in the descriptions of the 'simulated' sex scenes.  Diamond's humiliation would come from being in such compromising positions and the world thinking her more of a slut than she was.  But once again I thought..."what if..." and thus came the actual penetration.  

I did not want Sean to be portrayed as a 'bad guy' so added the misinterpretation of Diamond giving him the 'go ahead' signal to enter her.

The whole "she did not have to do it, but did, and not only allowed it, but enjoyed it" routine played out well in my mind, so hopefully that was relayed through the story.  It's a common theme I'm trying to put into the story, and although I add drugs, alcohol, or her mental state as excuses, those are more or less crutches I am relying upon to make it more realistic on something happening.  To me, Diamond is a strong-willed woman who is not a slut, it is just the circumstances of what is happening to her making her do some of the things she does.  That she begins to enjoy it needed to be somehow explained, so I threw those in to convince you the readers there were extenuating circumstances.

Twister

The Twister game was probably the longest part of writing the story.  I actually created an Excel spreadsheet with the colors, as well as an online spinner with the categories!  I had a list of 100+ Truth/Dare questions I found on the web as well as invented myself.

And then I played the game!  As I wrote the story, I would actually 'spin' the spinner, accepting whatever it landed on to be played out.  If a move was ultimately impossible to execute, that's when the game forfeited.  If one of the guys received a Dare I did not think would happen, they forfeited.

I actually had a lot of Dares with the cum-filled shot glasses...but those Dares never were randomly selected by the computer...and so they just did not happen.  That was both good and bad.  The good was I think everybody (including myself) was thinking something would happen with them or that they would be involved with the story.  The bad was the disappointment of them not ever happening, hehehe...but that's life.  And personally I think the build-up of wondering what they would be used for was as exciting as the disappointment in them not being used.

I played the game until a Dare came where Diamond had to do something sexual, her accepting the "anybody who spins x color gets to touch you for a minute" as the point of no return for her gangbang scene.

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Just wanted to share a few of the "reasons why" and how the story seemed to grow on its own.  Feel free to ask about any other scenes and I can try to relay what I was thinking at the time, or why I picked one guy or the next for certain scenes.

For example, a lot of people wanted Geiger to get more involved with Diamond's degradation.  As I was writing, I thought "Who would be the LEAST likely to end up screwing Diamond" and thought of the computer geek.  That it fit his agenda for showing he "had what it took" to be a field agent added to the story in my opinion.  And now Jen/Diamond is forced to pretend he's her fiance, having sex on a regular basis with somebody she just met is going to be pretty demeaning.

Or will it?  Guess we'll have to wait for Chapter 06 on that one!  ;)

5 comments:

  1. It took me awhile, but i finished it and OMG!!! What a good chapter. I love the photo-shoots and the settings. Larry the driver with his lecherous look; Tim the bartender/manager forcing her on the plane. Nick the geek, getting to act as her fiancee and Sean the model knowing of her little sister Suzanne.
    DeWight is a good villain and I'm glad Geiger wasn't in this chapter.
    The only thing i wish was that Dan would have denied Kitten the blow-job due to being engaged.
    I think DeWight would have fun with that, testing Dan's loyalty and such.
    The Club scene was good and the Twister was fun as well as the misunderstanding with the Bellhop.
    Just so much good scenes and DeWight giving information to Diamond, being confident now that he knows she is his for making money.
    Will Suzanne become a player in this story? Who will play Dan's fiance' when the time comes for Chuck to meet his girl? Will Kitten and John blow everything and snitch to DeWight?
    so many twist and turns, very good story, worth the wait and the length.

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    1. Thanks for the comments! Always appreciated, particularly for this chapter as it was a huge investment for me.

      The scene with Kitten and Dan was a touchy one. With DeWight not knowing of Diamond and Dan's involvement, the the possibility of the room being bugged, I wasn't sure how far to go. I finally settled on the Clinton definition of oral sex, LOL. That Chuck had to "finish up" for Dan with Kitten was supposed to relay a subconscious dependency of Dan for Chuck...the stronger versus weaker wills. Hard to portray...

      As far as Suzanne...she will be appearing again. That part actually came AFTER I announced the story to be finished, as a thought came to me right before I submitted the story ;)

      Also, the Kitten and John story is going to be a small sub-plot in the next chapter and chapter 8 or 9... ;)

      For everybody, PLEASE VOTE! Right now almost 10,000 reads of the story, but only 72 votes...I don't usually beg for votes, but I am curious to know what people thought as well as glean a bit more attention to the stories, hehehe.

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  2. Ahhh!! Don't tell me any more!!
    I'm only up to page TWELVE!! :-)

    I'm stretching it out......so to speak.. }:-) hahaha

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  3. Meant to add, I already voted, Doc... I'm one of those raising your average... :-)

    Thank you...

    Barry

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