Changes in points of view...Director Jekyll 02

So one of the more tabooed no-no's of writing is switching perspectives in points of view.  For example, talking about he and she and describing things from more of an "over the shoulder" type of story and then switching to the perspective of a character, "I felt this," or "they did this to me."  I made an attempt at that playing around with Lapdancing 04, but a lot of people felt I rehashed too many scenes; however, I was trying to show readers the other character's perspective.

For example, describing Diamond getting her hi-tech tattoo and Nick, the FBI agent feeling her up.  Then I switched to Nick's view in the van, having him relive HIS feelings and audacity at feeling up the stripper laying before him.  Then I described him watching Diamond perform for his fellow FBI agents and his view of watching things from the surveillance equipment.  Finally, I went back to Diamond's view dancing for the FBI agents.

I tried not to just repeat, but to give character depth and THEIR own take on matters...but many people did not like it.

The reason I mention it is I'm doing the same thing with Director Jekyll, although hopefully not "rehashing" as much.  The story starts out from the husband's telling, but then switches to a more third-person view on his wife's day at work and the set-up of everything that will be happening.  After about 40 pages Word format (roughly 6 pages Literotica) I am now describing the events taking place before him from the husband's point of view.


So the question to you, the readers.  Does this bother you?  Would you prefer reading the stories from more of a third-person view or from one of the character's points of view?  And if you read into a story from one perspective, does it get disorientating reading from another's?

The main reason I do so is so as the author, I am not describing things from an omniscient view, but instead, letting you live within a character to understand them more.  I could describe how each character felt from a third-person standpoint vs. that person's feelings:

"Heather gasped as she felt the the head of Senor Chacon's cock against her pussy, moaning in lust as he slowly moved forward, the hard shaft separating her labia as he slowly pushed into her core"

versus

"I heard my wife gasp, knowing Senor Chacon's cock had made contact with my wife's body, suddenly that gasp turning into a moan of pleasure as he moved forward, knowing the head of his cock was separating her slit and entering the core of her married pussy"

Obviously both are describing the same scene, but I'd like to think there is more relayed to the reader from the husband's point of view.

But wondering on what everybody thinks.  To reiterate, not asking if you like one or the other, but if you are reading in one view, and then that view switches to another character...

I've once again posted a POLL on the site, to get everybody's views.  I'm not asking if you like reading a third person story versus a first person story, but more do you mind the change of views.

Again, I refer to Lapdancing 04 for reference, as that was the one story that comes to mind where I attempted it.  I can easily go back and change things to completely third perspective, just curious what people think...

Sex from the beginning...or stretch it out?

So I have been currently on a push by my Muse working on my new "What's in a Name?" story.

For those who missed the recap, it is basically about a former beauty pageant wife who "itches" for that lifestyle again and obtaining titles.  She starts out by participating in bar contests (wet t-shirt, daisy dukes, etc.).  Then I'll have her sink further into less appropriate titles (MILF, MIAF, WILF, WIAF, etc.).

I don't want to give the story away, but I'm at a crossroads where I'm wondering what people enjoy.  I am getting close to the end of Chapter 01 which, not going into the circumstances too much, a wife ends up in a hotel room with another man.  There is no sex involved...they went out, had a good time drinking, and both are too drunk home.

There is heavy build-up of sexual tension, but as I said, there is no sex between them by the time the chapter ends...although the guy IS scheming about how he can have sex with the wife, he doesn't follow through with anything...yet.

So I had planned on him not having sex with her for several weeks (2-3 chapters), building up the tension until it is almost a given they will have sex and it is pretty much expected.

But then I woke up this morning thinking, "What if the wife wakes up half asleep and straddles her husband and suddenly realizes it is NOT her husband!?"

Obviously she is shocked at suddenly impaled by another man's cock but it feels so good they end up having morning sex.

So my question to you, my readers, is what sounds more erotic?  The sex scene is going to happen eventually, but should it be sooner versus later?  Do you enjoy things being drawn out and heightening of the sexual tension, or do you like the sudden "OMG I'm fucking my husband's coworker!" surprise, LOL.

It obviously changes the rest of the story as I was going to use the slow build-up of her teasing the coworker and slowly her giving in to letting him do more and more with her, but I could probably work with her having "mistake sleep sex" with him and then him using it to leverage her into acting more slutty.

I've created a poll gadget to cast your vote, but feel free to leave comments as well--whether you have questions on the story or whatever...but I'm getting close to writing it, so want to figure it out by next weekend!